The below clip is a short section - meant to be the lead - LEIA talking to JOHNNY who is another patient at the hospital LIEA spends half the play in
this section is supposed to show that they are connected spiritually and in madness via a section of them both ‘talking through the microphone’’
The play is a fantasy love story comedy drama where LEIA travels to other worlds and falls in love with a doctor who type character - not the JOHNNY in the below section - Johnny and Leia just think they are married to each other for a short section of inappropriate love - he’s about 60 and a vagrant type and she’s about 30 and not
although i’m Schizophrenic, i’m not that great at making it up off the top of my head - there are people who might be more in tune with what’s crazy and could help me to improve this section…
I’m also not sure if my director is right - she has suggested making this section like rap and dancey
but - it’s meant to be showing two people in deep connection 0- as does happen in hospital
not - a couple of people having a rap together as might happen over a roll up with a group of young people in the smoking area one evening
i just don’t know if this or anything similar i can come up with is basically schizo enough or is just an embarrassment to me
I feel very embarrassed about this section and it’s easy to feel embarrassed about my work if i don’t think it is good enough to stand up to people who are more experienced in theatre
This play is going to have a 2 week run next year - one week in community venues and one in a proper theatre - it’s the first time I’ve done anything full length and i’m co producing it with help from the premier mental health theatre in the country… i have had to set up a company - find paid actors and a load of community actors - who hopefully will all stay with me while the funding situation is still pending …
JUST need some kind of feedback on whether this is mental enough - or if there is anything that you can think of that would flow better… it’s hard standing up to a director who is a lot more experienced - i could have a rap in there but i’m starting to think that she is wrong to ask me to re write this bit…
What do you think?
LEIA: Who Jim wanted.
JOHNNY: Yea you can say that again. No rolled up jacket.
LEIA: Where are you? I’m listening.
JOHNNY: Packing up.
LEIA: Going somewhere so soon?
JOHNNY: They haven’t got any. Thank god for that.
LEIA: Can you make it for usey fadom?
JOHNNY: What’s that?
LEIA: You know what the problem is?
JOHNNY: It’s heavenly!
LEIA: Just waiting for it.
JOHNNY: Are you moving? (Leans towards LEIA)Do you think there will be a problem with the wishes?
(LEIA holds out clasped hands towards JOHNNY.)
LEIA: Talk into the microphone!
JOHNNY: There’s no end to it. Jeverby told them. All I did was ask!
LEIA: Is there a way round that?
JOHNNY: Take a cigar when you go. Any hints with that? How to light it…? Or smoke it…?
LEIA: Up your trousers round the back way. Grinning saying you’re a lovely man.
JOHNNY: From the target, you’ve got brain rot. Just a hero but terrible.
LEIA: Slight misery, always worth it though.
JOHNNY: Talisman likely. Funny colour. Is it an Impression? No it’s spring.