New poem, it's brief, whadya think, especially to @Discipline

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In the pale dawn, my face is spread

like a sheet over a glorious unrevealed painting,

wrinkles and sagging, the sheet has been used,

it has been tossed into the wind, drying quickly

and smelling hypoallergenic. So you wonder

about that painting, it’s all behind the face,

in a spacious gallery, my mind is a piece of art,

done with broad strokes, and intimate detail,

my mind has the sunshine that might come

after this pale dawn.

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I liked this part the best. I feel i can really relate. Well done @Daze!

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I really enjoy reading your poetry @Daze. I find myself visualizing the description in each line.

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This is a fantastic poem. I enjoyed it!

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Its all about getting those feelings out there

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