I just wrote this poem (what do you think, @Dreamy)

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Where have you been?
By Sheri

Where have you been, daylight,
pushed inside the pupil of God’s eye
who is up all night, and now all of us

can finally see? Left in the layers
of a chocolate cake when the birds
cut through it like silver chimes?

In a black flashlight? In the roots
of her black hair? The bulb in the dirt
that pushed its way up with a blue tint

and a green tilt holding the morning
with a swaying breeze of a slow dance?
Where have you been, daylight,

knocked out of me until I saw stars?
Covering long strips of road
like plastic wrap? I knew you’d

come on tiptoes from reaching
high for any prayer waiting on the
limb. You made the shade lay down

the night, and slowly it moves
across the yards, scanning for growth,
and mercy in the best green-covered book.

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Hi Daze! I can not evaluate your writing skills very well. Poetry is subjective. I like it, I think you should continue to express yourself this way or the way your prefer. For us and this community it is valuable to get through poetry a window to others experiences. About music sometimes it implies metric, sometimes it does not. There are writings that touch others heart for many reasons. My native language is not English, I have basic proficiency only. I am having mental a blocking in music for several months as I do not feel so good too. I feel always lonely and incomplete like something is never satisfied, I lack exercise and postpone everything, I dream so many things I do not accomplish never. But art is something I still appreciate anyway, being active or not. I have some ideas about a triangle of words, image and sound, many interesting things could be done. Like a Portuguese musician sings and literally translated: lets invent what has never been done yet. If you were writing for me to play instrumental and to make videos, well I feel very "dead" right now, it has been difficult lately. I imagine this poem like a succession of images and or photographs, letters could fall in the screen down one by one as images transition smoothly, just an idea. For me it is inspiring, it has to do with solitude, but it is calm, like a visual a delight too, it states the connection with God, many things ... Keep creative, keep your art if it gives pleasure and self expression, keep your dreams alive, do what you have to do if you can... Thats my advice for you. Your are appreciated. One more thing: some people are still remembered, known and admired by only one genial piece of artwork or literature/poem, so the challenge is always open, quantity is not the unique factor. I noticed something sensual in your poem, in the way you question the obscurity we live sometimes with daylight, it is very visual too, even if I have the linguistic barrier for me to decode it. i think we should keep connected and inspiring each other and the community, we never know if a new work arises. Thanks for opening your world to me this way.

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https://soundcloud.com/jonjames1/sunshine-daydreams

Don’t steal ur watch for a twenty
I steal ur watch for the henny
And yeah we got plenty
So many, bottles.
A penguin waddles
A man he likes to walk
Me, I like to talk
So I rap
Dag nabbit
You silly rabbit
I pull the rabbit out of the hat like magic
Delight
Don’t like to fist fight
But I give your girl a kiss, right?
So it’s bound to happen
Crowned, King of rapping

I can only do rhyming poetry really…yours is very abstract daze but I like it. You should try being more narcissistic and rhyming too…even if only for one poem…happy birthday to us soon btw daze!

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don’t be afraid to tell me, Hello, stupid,

the daylight is on the other side of the world, ha.

I think you are much younger than me, though not sure, and it’s nice to meet you.
don’t be too torn or hard on yourself.

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really nice poem @Daze reminds me of the poem “I am the grass” forget the author…really old poem…I loved the ending of your poem the best.

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thanks! It’s about the old deep green covered plain Bibles.

Do you remember them, Michael?

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yes, the tiny bibles? little green bibles. right?

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yeah!

1515151515

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Hello Daze, daylight is in Portugal, and I am just a stupid guy, ha. :slight_smile:
I am 34 years old, I have seen your photo in a thread and then I posted my photos there too.
I am hard on myself and need more acceptance about myself perhaps… but, on the other hand I just keep things simple.
Nice to meet you!

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I like and accept criticism from others, it helps me grow,

have found I don’t like it upon myself though, but yes, I do it.

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