I'd Redeem The Sky

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i’d fly the cliff for your dream if it meant your sky could believe.
id set fire to the heavens amidst the wonder as night.
id redeem the winds of south ghettos where born in ways of a lie. id redeem the sky

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Not bad. Here’s one I wrote:

I want to swim in the crystal oceans of your eyes.
I want to feel your precious heart beating,
As we float in ecstasy across the skies.
I long for your tender caress, and the sweetness of your emotion.
I envy the clothes that hold your every emotion.
A simple touch would mean so much to me.
A simple kiss would set us free.
I feel you tremble as we embrace.
I hear you sigh, as I touch your face.
Beautiful and fascinating,
It would be cruel to keep me waiting.
Your love means everything to me.
You’re all I need, can’t you see?

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thanks for sharing :slight_smile:

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Good stuff guys…

I like the “I’d redeem the sky” line quite a bit… sounds really cool to me

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ty. its actually a poem about ending this life for a greater purpose… im not considering suicide but thats what i mean in the poem

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huh…

I missed that. You use a lot of imagery, but a lot of it escaped me.

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in a way maybe saying id go to any lengths for a person

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I hear ya…

I have a person in mind when I think along those lines.

hah… I can share a poem I wrote for her the other week… gimme a minute

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Sing to remember
Dance to forget

Or just wait till you slide your hands down my fret

You’re made of unobtainium
So I’ll remain a friend

But to see you skin again
My lust for the
My undying sin

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nice :slight_smile: 15151515

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thanks man…

really she is unobtainable so I wanted to use that word…

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Yea. My one is far from reach too. Maybe an illusion to me maybe a test of soul

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Aint never a good sitch…

Near or far though… Those kinds of people seem to be the ones that make you not feel so alone.

I mean I’ve finally got a fascinating girl that I know in person to ponder about. She’s really opened my eyes in a lot of ways. Tons of ways. Directly even…

Kind of fulfills some backbone for life.

Like a relationship that doesn’t start or fail… So it just hangs out there as this friendly sort of thing.

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