Just finished rapping over a track that I posted here awhile back, tried to capture the struggle of trying to make a life for yourself while mentally ill. Let me know what you think!
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Very good! 
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Sounds very good @zwolfgang keep it up. You and @Jonnybegood should collab.
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Thanks for that work of art with the relevant lyrics.
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@Vertigo Thank you, glad you like!
@anon57786250 Thanks! I’d love to collab, especially with Gratitude I really liked the stuff I heard of his last year
@Here4You Thanks you! I’m new at lyrics so I was hoping they turned out alright
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Nice work @zwolfgang !
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Sounds good I like that beat too
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@Moonbeam Thanks 
@TheVoices Thanks! Glad you like the beat I made it when I was feeling super down so its kinda special to me
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Edit : keep on working, it got potential.
The verses are a little dull, and I don’t like that “aaaa” in the first minut.
You shouldn’t be afraid to play more with your voice,.
maybe make a 30 sec rap verses and play with it/repeat it/change it /etc for a 2-3 minute song
The beat is good but you should go ever further with the sounds, don’t let it be repetitive.
That 1 sec drum sounds from time to time are not enough (I think there were drum sounds)
The intro is unnecessary and boring but when you enter the first 20 sec of the song you can really feel it (I can at least) you should focus on keeping that vibe from the beginning after the intro.
I like the song and I think it got potential that why I gave you the “hard” feedback.
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I liked this…the chorus was catchy got me going a bit. Keep it up!! Sirens go off in silence.
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I think a collaboration would be cool & fun
Ps I didn’t really do salvia again lol just thought it’d be a cool concept
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@anon92220549 Thanks man! I love constructive feedback, the goal is to get better. Yeah that “aaa” was supposed to be a J Cole thing, didnt really know what else to do there. The beginning was also because I couldn’t think of anything to write for another verse, felt like I’d be repeating myself (I wrote them out of order, probably not the best idea I found).
But the drums man. The drums. I for the life of me can’t get them to knock man its insane. I did everything, compression, leveling, eqing, sidechaining and it still sounds like theyre not there. Oh well I’ll get it eventually.
So keep the vibe after the intro, got it. I thought that was my best verse too, was the first thing I wrote down. Thanks again for the feedback man I really appreciate you taking the time to critique my song and it means a lot to me that you think it has any potential at all considering its my first time doing vocals
@Jonnybegood Thank you! And dude! That track is so sick you got some talent. It is written in the stars that you will go far my man, be happy to collab just think I need to practice some first to keep up lol
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