A good microphone picks up more of your voice so it’s harder to hide your blemishes…it’s like better quality camera to news anchors…it’s better quality but now the whole worlds gonna see that acne!
So I’m getting used to it. Gotta rap more carefully. But it sounds good.
This song was hard to start with, now it’s gotten even harder
But sounds good
It sounds crisper and clearer. I think I prefer it. It’s a good song too.
Thanks for listening!
I also re did this one …I think I “nailed” this one a little more but i posted the original 3 times already so didn’t wanna be too repetitive
Sounds better - Keep on Rapping! 
If you haven’t already, you should check out Run The Jewels. They’ve been making some of the best rap records of these past few years IMO.
Great lyrics. Good beats. One thing i’d recommend though is working on your delivery so you don’t drag behind the beat.
Keep it up, though.
Yeah that one beat in particular is real hard…it was Acid Jazz…not meant for rapping. That said it’s possible but I need to work on my delivery you’re right…I’ve improved since I started so there’s hope though!
Really that was the most “constructive criticism” I’ve ever gotten…usually it’s “u suck” or “it’s good”. But that was some deeper insight… I thank you sir.
I told my friend I wanna be like atmosphere and he’s like “well you’re nothing like atmosphere…if there’s a rapper you should look up to its Eminem”…I say I’m nothing like Eminem!
I want a career alike to atmosphere…even if I’m unlike him. That’s my dream one day.
I always dreamed of being a rapper when I was younger. Then I started having kids and had to become a provider, and those dreams went out the window. But I wish you all the luck, keep grinding.
Nice work, @turningthepage! I’m a songwriter as well and although rap isn’t my genre, I appreciate the Art.
Gotta kick outta this…
I’ve actually got a killer bass beat I came up with and don’t know what to do with. I’ll send it your way one day when I get my basement studio up and running.
I’m going to the same school as Macklemore…maybe 4 years from now when I’m graduating I could meet him and make a song together and that’s my key to breaking out. I’m gonna study music even though my major will be writing…I feel ill learn better stuff taking poetry classes and stuff
Actually, I’m gonna upload the beat from my kid’s phone and email it to you. I think I can figure this out. I’ll try it tonight and get back to you. It’s got a nice hook…very catchy. I think you’ll like it.
If you make a ‘hit song’ out of my beat, credit me as ‘Stone’…my nickname in real life. 
Email it to me here…or do you need my actual physical email…I can pm it to you if that’s the case.
I’m excited!
I’ll see if I’m able to do it first…I’m low tech but my girls are handy. Then if I capture it on my email, I’ll ask you to PM me an email address so I can get it to you.
Saright? Saright!
Aright!
I’m listening to atmosphere and the difference between me and him is he’s a MAN… Of course he was like 30 when he got props…but I need to become a MAN. I can’t stay young forever, can I!? I’m an old soul at heart but not in physical presence. I come off very youthful…that will pass I hope.
My next biggest idol is Kendrick Lamar …he’s a Gemini like me and very poetic.
I feel white rappers it’s a gift and a curse…it’s harder to succeed…but when they do succeed they’re like 30 years old which is an advantage. It’s Too bad I started rapping late…though
I dunno man. I really slip into your cadence. After a few seconds you’ve got me ‘in the grasp’. I’ll try and get this little piece to you tonight. 
@turningthepage…
My kids and I are doing something wrong. We can record, but it’s not getting to my email.
I’m going to try again this weekend with my brother, and see if I can pick up the track. I’ll let you know on this thread how I make out.
Good call! 