A Poem...... Well My first attempt from long ago... Give me honest opionions please

Not Quite Human
By : SWeldon

Not fictional, but not quite human.
I feel as if I have lived a thousand years.
Living from the mountain tops.
To the valleys down below.
Searching and watching for things to come to pass.
Listening to the waves of Oceans caressing the beaches from shore to shore.
Looking at the star above , and hoping for love to fill my soul.
I feel as if I was not quite human, not I know I am Just a simple human being.
Living for the moment hoping for eternity to come.

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Nice one …
Appriciated…

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that was tight . me too bruh

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@sweldon001

It’s really good.

I like the contrasts, comparisons, descriptions and metaphors.

Mountains and valleys, oceans and stars, moment and eternity. Living, searching, listening, looking and feeling.

“listening to the waves” “hoping for love to fill my soul”

I was moved by your poem. Keep writing.

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Good poem!
Keep on writing @sweldon001!

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