I have written a novella. It’s only 23,000 words long so not too taxing. It is free to read on the link below.
“A Novella that explores the discovery of a psychotropic flower that causes the user to experience the emotions and hear the voices of animals. The tale takes on a journey of a student turned militant by the hallucinogenic drug, as he sets out to change the world into a vegan one.”
Here is a link to the book:
If you can please submit a review on the webpage by pressing the blue button in the top left hand corner of the screen that is if you can be bothered to read it, as every voice counts.
“Practicing an art, no matter how well or badly, is a way to make your soul grow, for heaven’s sake. Sing in the shower. Dance to the radio. Tell stories. Write a poem to a friend, even a lousy poem. Do it as well as you possibly can. You will get an enormous reward. You will have created something.”
The first chapter is good! I’ll try taking more bites out of this today…
Cool premise though. A lot of people are curious about ayahuasca… it’s a pretty neat read. It reminds me of a few personal experiences during pre-onset.
It’s got good impacting content. I’m going to try to finish it in the next couple days here.
I have a few pointers but I want to finish it first. There are some personal guidelines I follow myself that you might like the philosophy of.
You’ve got really good word choice all around. I don’t think the “, however,” transition is correct. However can be considered an introductory clause… so “sentence. However,” would fix all those.
I noticed a lot of sentences that didn’t have spaces after their periods.Like this… intead of. “Like this”
Also there was a sentence that wasn’t capitalized in chapter 3. I believe it started with the word “He.”
I gotta say that this piece does feel very appropriate. It’s got a sense of innocence and playfulness. It has a lot of depth, but that’s the most appropriate part. You don’t overdue it and it doesn’t seem like you are trying to sell yourself as an author. It’s strictly fiction and in that it’s easier to entertain.
I remember another writing tip.
Tense has to be really sorted out before hand. I was accused once by not getting my past, present, future tense statements wrong.
I can’t conjure up an example… but it’s important to know that if you’re writing in present tense that all verbs are in present tense… same with past tense…
I did notice you did something neat though. There was a present tense blurb… and you appropriately used third person past tense to describe something that occurred previously.
At this point I’m starting to doubt my own understanding… so take that with a grain of salt… just something to consider. If you get back to editing, look for present tense action phrases and make sure they’re appropriate or flip them to past tense.
It’s a tricky business is writing. I wrote it playfully, it’s true. It is not an indepth investigative piece, but rather a tall tale with undercurrents of morality that may or may not prick other’s curiousity.
This is only my second book and I am not ready yet to write a complex, intricate ‘masterpiece’…
Veganism is very popular these days and the publishing page seems to have a young female audience given the number of vampire fantasy novels it has, so it may have a chance.
I can send you an email attachment with the full document on it
. It’s a grand compliment to have someone appreciate my work, and editing is what all author’s do these days.
Finish the book in its entireity as it may fall apart yet, and see if you still want to do it. I would of course credit any editing. The site I am pubishing on doesn’t really have room for a credit on its site.
The ‘However’ thing is of note as I didn’t now the old fashioned rule doesn’t apply any more, so it could really help.
Do you have an English degree? I know you are astute from our conversations. My schooling failed me tremendously. I would be very grateful if you could or would take up your time with my book, but I can’t pay you. I would be honoured though.
